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Interview form the basic selection criteria for most large companies. However, some people think that interview is not a reliable method of choosing whom to employ and there are better methods. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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Interviews are mostly used by big
organization
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organizations
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 to select their employee, but some people argue that it is not the most
compitent
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competent
 way of selecting their workers. I agree with the opinion that
interview
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an interview
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 is not the best way to choose a candidate for your company.
Face to face
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 questioning usually just scraps the surface when it comes to knowing about a candidate.
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 most interview questions are
closed ended
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 and
limits
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 the answers of the person who is interviewed.
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Secondly
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Secondly,
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 the questions are usually repeated in all job interviews, not only does
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makes
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make
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 them predictable but
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easly
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easily
 crammed.
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 they are
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time consuming
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 and expensive for both the employer and the employee.
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example
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 the company hiring should create
time
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, place and
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person
personnel
 for the interviews, which are
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very expensive. There are
others
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other
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 ways to identify the most suitable person for your company,
this
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 includes giving them tasks which
suites
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suit
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 their profession and see if they can do it flawlessly. The individual who will finish the task well will be the best candidate.
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 is usually less
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time consuming
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time-consuming
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 and requires minimal supervision. Another method which you can use is through
recommendation
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recommendations
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by people you trust.
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 scenarios happen when other people have seen the level of professionalism and work
ethics
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ethic
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 of a person and they recommend them to you.
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 interview being
basic
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 selection criteria for jobs is expensive and
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time consuming
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 and there are other methods
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 as recommendation which
is
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are
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 less costly and
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time saving
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Expand your introduction to provide more context and a clear thesis statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to provide a stronger conclusion that summarizes your main points and enhances the overall argument.
Task Achievement
Include more specific examples or evidence to support your points about alternative methods of selection.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion and structure, making it easy to follow your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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