You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a town which is far from your home. Write a letter to the manager of the shop. In your letter: say which electrical goods you want ask questions about the cost of the goods and how to pay explain how you will collect the goods. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...

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Dear sir or madam I am writing to you to get some information.I would like to buy some electrical goods from your shop Do you have these items? A tablet lamp,a phone cable for Samsung. I not can you order them?How long will it take?
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do they cast?Can I pay with cash or a card?If I Can not come coon how long Can you keep for me. I wait for your reply. Thank you Yours faithfully Azizbek

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to structure your letter with clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific point. This will enhance the overall clarity of your message.
task achievement
Consider using a more formal tone throughout the letter to suit the context of writing to a shop manager.
task achievement
You clearly stated the goods you are interested in, which is important for task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
You included relevant questions about payment and collection, showing good engagement with the task requirements.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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