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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. UNIVERSITY SPORTS CENTRE (present) Gym Outdoor courts Changing room 25m Pool Outdoor courts Reception Leisure pool Changing room Sports shop UNIVERSITY SPORTS CENTRE (future plans) Changing room 25m Pool Gym Reception S ;ро hall Changing room > E

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The maps illustrate the current outline of the university's sports centre and that of a proposed development plan.
Overall
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, the centre is predicted to expand significantly, with outdoor courts extirpated entirely and new facilities added.
To begin
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, based on the first map which is the current design, there is only one main entrance and exit located north of the athletic place. It leads to the reception, a seating area to the east, and a changing room to the
west
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. From there is a swimming pool of 25 meters depth built centrally.
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, a gym is south of the centre, and to the
west
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 and east are existing outdoor courts.
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, based on the second map which depicts the plan, the size is expected to increase substantially. The main entrance, reception, changing room, pool, and sitting area will remain the same.  The gym area will
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 survive,
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 the size will be extended to the east, with the sports hall south of it. To the northeast-south will be two blocks of a dance studio.
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,  a cafe and new changing place will emerge east of the main entry, whilst another changing space and sports shop will be created
west
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 of it. The outdoor courts of nowadays will not be included in the plan,
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, a leisure pool will be designed
west
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 of the present-day changing cubicle.

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introduction/conclusion
The introduction could provide a clearer overview of the key differences between the current and proposed layouts. Consider mentioning specific aspects you will address in the body.
coherence
Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus. For example, discussing only the current layout in one paragraph and the proposed layout in another can enhance clarity.
task achievement
Try to include more specific details regarding the changes, such as measurements or specific locations to support your points more effectively.
coherence
Good use of transitional phrases such as 'To begin' and 'Furthermore' helps the flow of ideas.

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