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Band 4.5

More and more people are working from home rather than at the workplaces. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Working at the
workplace
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 or at
home
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 has some
its
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advantages and disadvantages, it depends on the person and on the nature of the
work
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, not all careers can be done at
home
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, and
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lot
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a lot
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 of
jobs
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 have to be done in the
workplace
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, like most of the medical field, the
engenering
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engineering
 field, etc; but a
lot
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 of
jobs
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 do not necessarily require
the
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its
empleoys
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employees
employs
 to
work
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 at the
workplace
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, take the teaching careers
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, you do not have to go to school or
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 to teach, the world is evolving every day, technology helps us with a
lot
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 of things nowadays SO yes it depends on the job first
then
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 the person. If we want to take it deeper, some individuals are not capable of doing intense
body
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bodywork
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work
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 which prevents them from getting
envolved
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involved
 in a
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lot
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jobs
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, these
pepole
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people
 need to get
jobs
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 that suit their condition, working
form
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from
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 an office
dose
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does
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 not have to be at a
workplace
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 you can do it in your
home
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, to take it
further
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 even being a lawyer
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not
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does not
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 require working out of
home
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, going to
he
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the
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 court
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does
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 not have to be
physically
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, think of it we all can be in the court without being in the court, yes exactly what you are thinking we can just do a sample online face call. In conclusion, working at the
workplace
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 is not ideal for everyone, it varies from someone to someone and from job to job, in the
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if
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of
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 the world changed, technology
took
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 over and
made
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make
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 everything from
aspict
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aspect
 easier for us.
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, the trend of
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work
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working
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 from
home
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 has
spred
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spread
 to many sectors, some employees find they become more productive
while
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 others miss the
collegue
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colleague
college
 interaction and real team meetings, but it's all a case of what suits you the best, the flexibility sometimes leads to unorganised
schedual
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schedule
schedules
 and missed deadlines, still, it's a challenge that many choose to face as the world
move
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 forward in technology.

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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
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Include more specific examples and details to support your arguments, as this would strengthen your overall task response.
task achievement
You present arguments for both sides of the debate, which demonstrates a balanced approach.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion reiterates the main points, which is a good practice in essay writing.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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