The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa, subscribing to move by and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa, subscribing to move by and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa, subscribing to move by and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the percentage of individuals in Africa, subscribing to cell
phone
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phones
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and
telephone
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telephones
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between 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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cell
phones
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phone
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subscribtions
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subscriptions
are the most
favorite
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favourite
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amoung
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among
African
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Africans
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,
due to
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the increased
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increased
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in
used
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in nearly 20 years. The percentage of mobile
subscribtions
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subscriptions
had grown and
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fixed
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the fixed
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line
at the end
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of the period. Meanwhile, telephone
subscribtion
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subscriptions
remained steady throughout the years. In 1994, the fixed line rate was at 1.7% ,
then
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increased gradually over 6 years and reached 3% by 2001. After that, the rate rose slowly and stopped at 3.1% in the year 2004.
On the other hand
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, the mobile phone
subscribtion
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subscriptions
started to rise in 1996. The percentage of cell phone subscribers skyrocketed and
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telephones in 2002. The mobile
subscribers
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subscriber's
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ratio kept
grew
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growing
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dramatically and reached its peak at 8.8% by 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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