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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The charts compare the percentage of British
students
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 at a university in England who could speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, the number of
students
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 who were not able to communicate in other languages
besides
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 English was significantly higher than those who knew more than one language in both years. In 2000, 30% of
students
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 were monolingual,
while
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 the remaining 70% spoke at least one additional language. Among these, 20% could speak Spanish, making it the most popular foreign language. German was spoken by 10% of
students
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, followed by French at 15%.
Additionally
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, 10% of
students
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 were bilingual. By 2010, the percentage of monolingual
students
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 increased by 5%, reaching 35%. There was a significant decrease in the proportion of
students
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 speaking Spanish, which dropped from 20% to 10%.
However
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, the percentage of
students
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 speaking German remained steady at 10%. The figures for
students
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 speaking French and those who were bilingual or knew other unspecified languages each increased by 5%.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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