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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts given depict information about British
students
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 at a certain university who could speak other languages
in addition
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 to English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in both years the main part of
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students
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was
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were
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 not able to speak another
language
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. In 2000,
students
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 who knew German or two other languages were the lowest,
while
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 Spanish, German and French were known by fewer people in 2010. In each
of
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academic
years
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year
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,
students
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 mainly spoke only English, accounting for 30
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2000 and 35
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2010. The number of
students
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 who
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 able to understand two languages was 10
percent
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 in 2000, it was 15
percent
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 in 2010 by increasing. Only Spanish was
additionally
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 known by
students
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 was 20
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2000
as well as
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 10
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2010.
French
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The French
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language
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 was 15
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per cent
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 in 2000,
whereas
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 it was 10
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percent
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by
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decreasing in 2010 . German was merely that it was the same for both academic years.
Studens
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Students
 who knew another
language
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 were the second level
in addition
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 to English in 2010, accounting for 20
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percent
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,
whereas
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 it was
the
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third place
as
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in
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 the French
language
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 in 2000, it accounted 15
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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