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The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of people (
children
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, men, women ) who had consumed that five portation of fruits and vegetables seven
day
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days
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 of week in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the chart that the highest number of women had
ate
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eaten
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 green- pant and fruits,
In contrast
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,
children
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 were the lowest
consumer
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consumers
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 of fruits and vegetables.
Moreover
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, women had
rose
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risen
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with
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by
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 around 25%
then
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 it dramatically increased by 35% in 2006 which was
decrease
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decreased
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 by 30% in 2008.
Furthermore
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, men were highest than
children
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 it had started
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at aroun
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aroun
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around
by
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apply
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20%,
However
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, there were
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a fluctuation
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fluctuation
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fluctuations
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accured
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accrued
 between 2002 to 2005
then
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 it
was
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apply
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significantly increased by around 30% which badly decreased
2
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to 2
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% in 2008.
Lasly
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Lastly
,
children
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had
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apply
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did not taken the high
proporation
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proportion
 of
vegetavles
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vegetables
 and
fruids
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fruits
fluids
 still 2006, it was 20%. the
children
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had
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apply
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ate
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eaten
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a significantly
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significantly
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significant
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 25% portion of
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the geen
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geen
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green
 plant food.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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