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The pie chart shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 report derives from a pie chart which illustrates the percentage of a variety of types of households living in poor communities in the United Kingdom in 2002. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective , it is readily apparent that sole parents and single without
children
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people
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 are the majority of
people
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 living in poverty areas.
While
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 Aged
couple
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couples
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consider
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were considered
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 the lowest percentage of
people
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lived
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living
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 in poverty areas in 2002. In 2002 , Single parents and single without
children
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considered
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were considered
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 50% of the population living in poor areas in the United Kingdom , Distrupted as
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this
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apply
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26% for sole parents and 24% for single persons without
children
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 . Almost 29 % of
people
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 living in the poverty community in
UK
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the UK
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 are
couple
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couples
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 with
children
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 , As
will
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well
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 as all households. Three family categories consider the lowest population in
Proverity
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Poverty
 in the UK , which are aged couples, single aged persons and couples without
children
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 by 2% difference to become 5% ,7% ,
9
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and 9
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%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • category
  • families
  • poverty
  • UK
  • single-parent families
  • couples with children
  • disparities
  • economic factors
  • welfare support
  • job market conditions
  • social issues
  • proportional breakdown
  • significant percentage
  • data summary
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