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The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The data displays the adjustments in the number of outboard visitors in three various areas in
coast
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the coast
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, lakes, and mountains in each nation in Europe.
Overall
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, the total number of individuals visiting the coast increased significantly throughout the given period.
While
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 the
lakes
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lake
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 destinations were not popular at the beginning, people who visited mountains were the lowest by the end of the time. The coast
numbers
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number
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 of tourists who started at 40
thousand
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 in 1987 experienced a slight decrease after five years to reach roughly 35
thousand
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.
Then
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 there was a dramatic rise over the remaining period to reach its peak
by
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of
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 around 75
thousand
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. The lakes started at 10
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thousand
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10,000
 as the least common destination.
This
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 figure rose dramatically to 40 million in 1997.
Moreover
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, it is becoming more trendy, so the number
leaped
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leapt
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 to reach the peak of over 70
thousand
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 in 2002 before falling rapidly to 50
thousand
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 in 2007.
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, the mountains witnessed a gradual increase for the whole period to around 35
thousand
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 in 2007.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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