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Writing Samples
Band 5

You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: Give details of your stay What were the high & low points of the hotel What are your suggestions; recommendations and / or complaints about the hotel You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

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Dear
john
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John
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, I am writing
this
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 letter to thank you for your good service as I stayed in your hotel from 20th to 27th of
this
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 month, I had a great time
spending
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spent
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 at your place, food was
also
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 very tasty.
Although
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thier
Correct your spelling
there
their
 are some issues I faced which I want to
adress
Correct your spelling
address
 you. Hospitality and room service was excellent. Rooms were quite decorated and sceneries were good, towels and bedsheets were quite clean. But I had a bad moment in
pool
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the pool
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 water were not clean, and I noticed some fungus inside
pool
Correct article usage
the pool
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 even
floors
Correct article usage
the floors
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 were dirty one can easily slip and
also
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 there were no
sign
Fix the agreement mistake
signs
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bords
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boards
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. I found
very
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it very
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 hard to find anything. I would like to give some suggestions for maintenance as extra staff should be kept for cleaning and assisting
coustmers
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customers
, refurbishments need to be done
on
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to
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 surroundings, sign
bords
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boards
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 are necessary for people to know where to go.
Linking Words
This
Correct determiner usage
These
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 few things will help in bringing travellers back. Hoping services will improve. Regards, Karan Mummaneni.

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Ensure correct spelling and grammar to enhance clarity, like 'there' instead of 'thier' and 'address' instead of 'adress.'
coherence and cohesion
Try to separate points into distinct paragraphs for better coherence. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
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Consider adding a more formal closing to your letter for a professional tone. Simple phrases like 'Thank you for your attention to these matters.' could work well.
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You provided specific details about your stay, which enhances your letter's overall effectiveness.
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Your positive remarks about the hospitality and room service show a balanced perspective.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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