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The first chart below shows the percentage of school-aged girls and boys who were at secondary school in four regions of the world in 2000. The second chart shows the percentages of college-aged men and women in higher education in the same year.

The first chart below shows the percentage of school-aged girls and boys who were at secondary school in four regions of the world in 2000. The second chart shows the percentages of college-aged men and women in higher education in the same year.
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The bar charts provide information on the proportion of school-aged and college-aged
students
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 who were able to pursue secondary and higher
education
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, categorized
according to
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 gender in four
regions
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 namely
Europe
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,
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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,
Latin
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America
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 and East
Asia
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 in 2000.
Overall
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, there were more female
students
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 than male
students
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 in secondary schools in
Europe
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 and
Latin
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America
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,
while
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 the opposite trend was observed in the remaining
regions
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. Regarding higher
education
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, all
regions
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 recorded a larger number of male
students
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 than female
students
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, except in
Europe
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. Notably,
Europe
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 had the highest proportion of
students
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 with access to both levels of
education
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 across genders,
while
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Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 had the lowest
attendance
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rates
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. In terms of secondary
education
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, the percentage of school-aged
females
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 was higher than that of
males
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 in
Europe
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, though the gender gap was minimal, with
males
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 accounting for around 98% and
females
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 reaching nearly 100%. In
Latin
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America
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,
females
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also
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 outnumbered
males
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, with roughly 60% of
females
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 and 50% of
males
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 attending school.
In contrast
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,
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 and East
Asia
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 had higher male
attendance
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rates
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 compared to
females
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, with 60% of boys attending school in East
Asia
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, nearly double the proportion in
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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. Meanwhile, female
attendance
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rates
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 in these
regions
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 were around 55% and 20%, respectively. As for higher
education
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,
Europe
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 had the highest
attendance
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rates
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, with
females
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 surpassing
males
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 at 70% and 60%, respectively. In
Latin
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America
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, 20% of male
students
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 had access to higher
education
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, compared to 15% of
females
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. East
Asia
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 had slightly more male
students
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 attending college, with 10% of
males
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 compared to 9% of
females
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.
Lastly
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,
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 showed the most significant disparity in access to higher
education
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, with only 5% of
males
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 and 3% of
females
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 attending college.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, education, regions, europe, sub-saharan, africa, latin, america, asia, attendance, rates, females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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