The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa, subscribing to move by and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa, subscribing to move by and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa, subscribing to move by and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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the proportion of Africans who
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the
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mobile and
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phones between 1994
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2004.
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, we can see that both
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systems were used but the mobile changed enormously.
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According
to the diagram, in the beginning, fixed phones were subscribed to use about 1.7, it slightly hit 3 in 2001 and after
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there
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just a slight change of 3.1 till 2004.
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to mobile were
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0.06 almost near to zero in 1994 but we can
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see a slight growth in it till 1999. Onwards, we can visualize a gradual growth in it The consumption of mobile in 2004 was 8.8.

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