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Some people like to work in small companies or businesses while others prefer working for large companies or government organizations. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for a large company or organization?

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 fast-paced world, jobs are crucial for individuals. Some people can be
statisfied
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satisfied
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the
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 job in a small firm,
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, others prefer to work in
a
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big
cooperations
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corporations
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.
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the
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 merits
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demrits
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demerits
 of large
companies
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, in the upcoming paragraph. To initiate, there are numerous
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reason
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reasons
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 which shows that people like to work in big organizations. The first and foremost benefit is salary, large
companies
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 provide a good wage to
employees
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 which
help
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helps
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 them
in
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financially
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 employer gives
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a bonus
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bonus
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bonuses
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 to workers who complete the task
in
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on
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 the proper time and achieve a target and
also
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 include
benefits
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 with the job title
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 as dental care,
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massage
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, physiotherapy, etc. So,
emoloyees
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employees
employers
 can take advantage of these
benefits
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 with the work.
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 to
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, some large
companies
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 have a good link with
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foreign organizations and they promote good workers in
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those
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companies
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, so, they can help the
companies
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the
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new ideas. The main
reason
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 behind
is
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this is
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 salary, bonus, and
benefits
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, which
captures
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capture
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 the interest of
employees
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 in large
companies
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. One drawback of large
companies
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 is
busy
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their busy
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schedule
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schedules
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. Actually, workers, who are working in big organizations, always looking
in
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for
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 stress
becuase
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because
 reputable
companies
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 have many competitors in the country and they have limited time to complete the target, and minor mistakes put
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the employee
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employee
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employees
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 in trouble
,
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 because
may be
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maybe
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companies
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 will
loose
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lose
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million
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millions
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 of dollars
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in deal
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deal
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deals
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Due to
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this
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reason
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,
employees
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 live in stress,
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employer
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employers
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 have so many options,
they
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that they
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 can easily terminate the employee
,
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 if they
were
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 not complete the task during the timetable hours.
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, a survey was conducted in
USA
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the USA
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 in 2023, which shows that 75% of
employees
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 are suffering from obesity, heart attack, and depression issues.
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 is the main
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,
heart
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the heart
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 attack rate is increasing day by day.
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, it can be inferred from the above confabulation that there are abundant merits of working in large
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 because it provides
good
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a good
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 salary,
benefits
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, and bonus, which attract the
employees
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.

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grammar
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, as these can distract from your message and lower the overall quality of your writing.
structure
Try to provide clearer topic sentences that directly address the main points of each paragraph to improve clarity.
content
Include more specific examples and explanations to strengthen your arguments and provide clear real-world applications of your points.
content
The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of working in large companies, showing an understanding of the topic.
coherence
The use of transitions between sentences and paragraphs is effective in most instances, aiding readability.

Your opinion

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