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The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the China population in percentages divided by 3 different
age
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 groups from 1960 to the year 2050 . Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
people
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 over the
age
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 of 65
years
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 old were the lowest percentage
between
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among
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 all groups.
While
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 the highest
age
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 group was the
people
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 aged from 15- 64 in the given period of time. Chinese
people
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 aged 15 -64
years
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 old were above 35% in 1960 and increased every 10
years
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 to become 2050 more than half of the population by almost 53%. The
age
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 group from 0-14
year
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years
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 old was almost 37%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period which
consider
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 the highest group in 1960 , that dropped over the next 10
years
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 to reach 17.5 in 2050.
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,
people
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 aged above 65
years
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 old were almost 5% in 1960 ,which remains steady over 60
years
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. The percentage in 2010 was almost 10 % with a gradual increase to the end of the period with above 17.5 % of the Chinese population in 2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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