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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line chart
provieds
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provides
 key information about the exportation rate of
Astralia
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Australia
 to four
diffrent
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different
 countries which are Japan,
US
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the US
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 ,
China
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 and India. The units are measured in
precent
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per cent
recent
.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that in the course of 10 years from 2000 to 2010
China
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 had
huge
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a huge
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 jump
of
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in
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exports
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 from
Astualia
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Australia
.
In addition
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, India
was
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 the the lowest
exports
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 where the highest
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percent
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percentage
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 equivalent to almost
7percent
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7 per cent
,
whereas
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China
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 reached
to
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apply
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30
persent
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per cent
.
According to
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 what is shown, US and
China
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 had the same
exports
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 percentage which was nearly 10
percent
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 in 2010. Japan had
extreme
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an extreme
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 drop in 1990. from 1990 until 2000 the
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exports
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export
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 rate of
US
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the US
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was fluctuating
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fluctuated
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. from 2000 until 2010 US
exports
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droped
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dropped
 almost 7
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percent
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per cent
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,
While
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 India increased from almost 3
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percent
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per cent
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 to nearly 13
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, exports, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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