The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph
illustrate
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the numbers of men and women research
students
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studying six computer science subjects at US
university
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in 2011.
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,
it is clear that
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the highest research for both
gender
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was on Natural Science by 200
students
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.
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,
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the lowest research for men was on Mathematics ,
approximately
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40
students
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,
whereas
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,for the women was on Linguistics
by
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around 70
students
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.
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, there was
significant
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a significant
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diffrence
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difference
amoung
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among
the
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both gender in Mathematics , the girls had got double the boys ,approximately five
time
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at 200
students
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,
while
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the boys had just 40
students
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.
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up
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with
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, there are three significant
diffrence
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difference
differences
in the graph ,
whereas
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tow
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two
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of them are slightly
simmilar
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similar
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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