IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company.

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Dear manager I am writing to inform you that
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 will not be able to attend the office for a week as my exams are approaching and
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 really difficult for me to manage
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 between my studies and my job.
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 I want to let you know
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 year
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 was admitted
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 course related to computer programming which gives
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 skills regarding the different software languages.
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,
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 course requires a lot of learning and written practice which could only be fulfilled when
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 give my complete attention towards my coding subjects. During
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 week off I will do my best to attend morning online meetings and check my emails daily to make sure that
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 have not missed anything important.
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, my main focus would be to pass
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 examination by giving my best as
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 degree could be the biggest deciding factor in reaching my goals.
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 to
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 will utilise
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 by attempting more online quizzes and working on my weaker concepts
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 believe that my qualifications could prove to be very effective in terms of company growth as
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 era is all about technology and in
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 every company
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professional engineers to meetup their
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 requirements. I really appreciate your support during
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 and hope to receive positive feedback from you soon. Yours faithfully Ashir Syal

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking your paragraphs into smaller ones. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea for better clarity.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for capitalization and grammar errors, such as 'i' instead of 'I' and 'todays' which should be 'today's'.
task achievement
The letter has a polite tone and clearly states the request for time off, which is excellent for task response.
task achievement
You have effectively explained how the qualification will benefit your role and the company, showing good understanding of task requirement.
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