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Band 3.5

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter: describe the item explain where and when you left it say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Ashima
gulati
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Gulati
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 writing
this
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 letter for my lost
bag
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. I
travellered
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travelled
last
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 week on Shatabdi Express which
depart
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departed
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 from Amritsar station at 7:00AM carrying two suitcases with me
along with
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 my black
hand
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handbag
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bag
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. My black
color
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colour
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bag
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 with golden zip and one pocket in the front. It
have
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has
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 my wallet in that which has my all ID card including my Adhar card, Voter ID and driving license. Apart from that $500
in
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is in
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 my wallet.
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Bag
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The bag
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also
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 includes some medicines and Clothes in it. I was sitting in coach H8 seat number 40
where
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when
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 missed
by
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my
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bag
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. I would request you to please locate my
bag
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 might be someone
hand
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handed
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 over my
bag
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 in
lost
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the lost
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 and found department. As it has my wallet and all
important
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importants
 Id's in that. Hope to hear
positive
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a positive
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 and quick response from your side. your
sincerly
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sincerely
 Ashima Gulati

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coherence cohesion
Ensure correct spelling of words to improve clarity. For example, correct 'travellered' to 'traveled'.
task achievement
Try to develop each point with more detail or explanation. For instance, you could explain why the items in the bag are important to you.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to include a more formal closing statement, such as 'Thank you for your assistance'.
task achievement
You have successfully expressed the importance of the item lost and detailed its contents clearly.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a logical flow of information regarding the lost item and your request.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable
  • distinguishing features
  • route
  • carriage
  • seat number
  • lost and found department
  • appropriate steps
  • contact information
  • swift and positive action
  • item of value
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