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The bar chart illustrates the global sales figures (in billions of dollars) for four categories of digital games—mobile phone games, online games, console games, and handheld games—from 2000 to 2006.

The bar chart illustrates the global sales figures (in billions of dollars) for four categories of digital games—mobile phone games, online games, console games, and handheld games—from 2000 to 2006.
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Overall
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, handheld
games
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 consistently recorded the highest sales throughout the period,
while
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 console
games
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 experienced a gradual decline.
In contrast
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, both mobile
phone
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phones
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 and online
games
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, which entered the market later, showed a steady upward trend in global revenue. In 2000, only handheld and console
games
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 were present, with handheld
games
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 leading at approximately $11
billion
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 and console
games
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 trailing at around $6
billion
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. From 2001 onwards, mobile phone
games
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 appeared on the chart, generating modest sales, followed by online
games
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 in 2002. Both categories experienced significant growth, with online
games
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 slightly outperforming mobile
games
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 by 2006, reaching about $9
billion
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 compared to roughly $7
billion
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 for mobile
games
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. Sales of handheld
games
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 continued to rise throughout the period, peaking at nearly $18
billion
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 in 2006. Meanwhile, console
games
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 saw a consistent decline in popularity, falling to around $3
billion
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 in the final year. In summary, the chart highlights a clear shift in consumer preferences over the seven-year period, with handheld, online, and mobile phone
games
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 gaining popularity,
while
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 traditional console
games
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 steadily lost market share. If you'd like, I can break down why
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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