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Band 5

Your local library is hiring a new staff member, and you are interested in applying for the position. Write a letter to the library manager to apply for the job. Write a letter.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am enquiring as to whether you currently have any positions in the area of librarian.
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 of mine told
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me about
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 your library two or three days ago. As a person who is interested in books and loves the smell of them, I thought
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 job
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 suitable for me. Actually, I cannot work
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the
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 full-time employee
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 my studies at school.
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, I am aware of
book
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the book
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 zone as I have attended
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apply
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competitions and have won before. Without any doubt, I can say that I have read at least one hundred books which are
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highly recommended by bookworms.
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, I am
native
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a native
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 American speaker and have ample knowledge of French and Spanish which makes the
ease
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easy
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in
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to
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communcation
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communicate
.In my opinion, these qualities
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 me fit
in
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for
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this
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 job. I feel that I am the most suitable candidate for
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 job because of my ambition
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for
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 books and
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my drive
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 to make a change in my life. I appreciate your consideration
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this
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 application and look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Rachel Green.

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Structure
Try to provide a clear subject line for your email or letter, even if this is not customary for letters. Start with a brief introduction that states your intent to apply for the position directly.
Coherence
Make sure to break down your qualifications and experiences into clearer sections in your letter, perhaps one paragraph for your background and another for your skills. This improves readability and understanding.
Language
Double-check for any grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'communcation' instead of 'communication', to ensure professionalism in your application. They can detract from your overall message.
Content
List specific relevant experiences or relate why your skills make you ideal for the librarian position. This could strengthen your case considerably.
Content
Your enthusiasm for books and keen interest in the librarian position is clearly expressed, which is important in a job application.
Strength
You have included your language skills, which is a great asset that adds value to your application.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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