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The graph below shows the quatities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quatities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 line graph demonstrates the amounts of goods which are moved by 4
distinc
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distinct
 sorts of transport in the United Kindom from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all of the countries
has been
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have
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 increased, except for rail,
with
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which
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being
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was
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 steady during the period.
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, transporting
with
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by
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 road took the first place as being the largest amount of
tonnes
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.
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 with
road
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the road
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, a remarkable steady can be seen between 1974 and 1994, standing around 70 and 80, respectively,
while
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 it
then
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 saw a
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dramatic
 increase
with
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reaching almost 100
million
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tonnes
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, which was the most value over the span.
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, water started
with
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at
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 just under 40 at the beginning,
whilist
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while
this
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 witnessed a significant rise, climbing
nearly
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to nearly
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 55, and stood stable
untill
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until
 the year
of
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1998,
whereas
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 it climbed significantly to roughly 64
million
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 in 2002. In 1974, rail commenced with exactly 40
million
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tonnes
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goods
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of goods
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 and dropped gradually till 1994, declining to about 25,
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 experiencing
a
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considerable growth, reaching just over 40. After
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while
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,
although
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 pipeline began with the lowest quantity with being around 5
million
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,
this
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 experienced a slight climb, jumping
almost
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 20
million
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tonnes
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 and remained constant until 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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