Write a letter to the hotel manager to make arrangements for hosting a party for one of your friends. In your letter, tell the manager about the reason for the party, explain what requirements you have, ask about the availability of facilities, and the menu.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you to arrange a party for a friend to be hosted on 11th April. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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you could do
this
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for me. I want to tell you that it is a birthday party and my best friend has come back from abroad after 5 years and it has been
longer
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a longer
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desire of me to celebrate her birthday grandly and
also
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she has purchased her own house.
Apart from
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this
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, I will require many things
such
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as
music
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a music
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system, a big hall, chairs, tables,
decoration
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decorations
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, and
also
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delicious
meal
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meals
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including snacks and beverages.
This
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party will be held at night so there is
requirement
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a requirement
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of
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for
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lights. I would like to ask
from
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apply
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you about
availability
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the availability
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of all requirements and one more thing that I want to ask
that
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is that
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can you arrange
waiters
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for waiters
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to serve
food
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the food
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. Please send me details as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Gurpreet.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied language and sentence structures to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs for better readability.
task achievement
The letter clearly states the purpose of the party and includes specific requirements.
coherence and cohesion
The closing remark effectively communicates eagerness for a response.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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