You are stayed in a hotel and was not satisfied with the service write letter to a manager

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the service that I received in your hotel
last
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week. I found your hotel from the websites, the comments were excellent,
however
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, when I was there I was angry
as well as
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sad.
Due to
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I paid 200$ for one day , it was highly expensive. First of all, I will start with that I bought a trip to Istanbul, the capital of Turkey on 12th May ,
however
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, they did not include the accommodation.
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I searched for different hotels to stay with my husband. I should book the room for 13th May. The next day I saw your advertisement on the Internet and I registered for a luxury room. The first thing I would like to draw your attention to is the manner of your staff and the food
that is
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provided. The cleaning service was completely worse, as when I told them to clean my room
while
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we were outdoors, they just ignored us. When I asked again, they did with rudeness. To make matters worse, surprisingly the breakfast wasn’t delicious and the sitting place was crowded,
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we could not find a place to sit. The reviews were perfect ,
therefor
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, I was surprised when I did not receive what I expected.
As a consequence
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, I did not fully enjoy my travel,
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and at
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the
end
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I felt nervous. To resolve the problem, I would appreciate it if you could return 30% of the payment. I look forward to receiving a replacement. Yours faithfully, Susana Georgina

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lexical resource
Try to use more varied vocabulary to express your feelings and experiences.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph covers a single main idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The letter includes a clear expression of dissatisfaction and specific examples of issues encountered.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, contributing to the overall formal tone of the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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