The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the
proportion
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of Canadian residents who have a career related to the five industries namely, manufacturing, services,
agriculture
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/fishing, construction, and energy/water between 1850 and 2020.
Overall
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,
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service
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the service
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industry
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showed a dramatic
increase
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over a period of 70 years
whereas
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manufacturing and
agriculture
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/fishing industries experienced the opposite tendency of the
service
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industry
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.
In addition
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, the other two faculties saw a slight
increase
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and decrease respectively. In 1850,
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service
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the service
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industry
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accounted for around a third of the total
proportion
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, which was marginally lower than manufacturing whose percentage was 36% as the top position of all. Regarding
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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/fishing
industry
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, the
proportion
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of the sector was approximately one-fifth of the total
proportion
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.
However
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, in 2020, the
service
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sector experienced a significant rise to more than 80%, which was just a
ninthfold
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ninefold
ninth fold
increase
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of
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in
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manufacturing with 9%.
In contrast
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, there was a substantial drop in the figure for manufacturing and
agriculture
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/fishing industries, to
one-forth
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one-fourth
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of the percentage in 1850 and to only 1% respectively. In terms of the other two, there was a much less change in the
proportion
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of them, with
3
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a 3
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%
increase
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in construction and with 2% decrease in energy/water.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, agriculture, service, industry, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce composition
  • significant shift
  • increase/decrease in percentage
  • service industries
  • manufacturing
  • construction
  • noteworthy trends
  • tech industry
  • economic evolution
  • technological evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
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