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The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 diffrent types of fast food in britain from 1970 to 1990

The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 diffrent types of fast food in britain from 1970 to 1990
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The line chart
ulistrets
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illustrates
 three different types of fast food and the
fiuger
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finger
figure
 of consumption
bteween
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between
 1970 and 1990 in the
uk
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UK
.
Overall
Linking Words
 it is clear to say that, fish and
chipes
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chips
 got the highest number comber
withe
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with
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, the other
foods
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food
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typ
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types
.
in
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At
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 the
begin
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beginning
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 of 1970
bothe
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both the
humburger
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hamburger
 and
the
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apply
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fish and chips got the same
figer
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figure
finger
aroud
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around
 20% to 80%.
comper
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Compared
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withe
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with
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 pizza, pizza had
aroud
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around
 the double number for the other foods
wiche
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which
riched
Verb problem
reached
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 300% in
the
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apply
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1970. After 10 years in 1980
fishchipes
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fishies
 had grown in tell, it
be
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is
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 100 and Hamburg be above
the
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apply
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100. in the same
period
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period,
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 the other food got a drop
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of aroud
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aroud
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around
 80%.
in
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at
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 the end of the 1990
fishechipes
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fisheries
 had 500
utlize
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utilize
 in
britain
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Britain
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 come,
seconde
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second
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 hamburger had around 300,
come
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and come
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last
Linking Words
pizze
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pizza
despite
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in
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 of, it was the largest
unmber
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number
bteween
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between
tehem
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them
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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