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You recently visited a local museum and had a mixed experience. Write a letter to the manager of the museum. In your letter: describe your visit to the museum explain what you liked and what you didn’t like suggest some improvements to help enhance the visitor experience You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my feelings toward my personal experience after visiting your
museum
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last
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 week. It was a fascinating atmosphere to have the opportunity to come by to one of the biggest and most popular museums in the city. I went to visit the exhibition
along with
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 my family who
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 intentionally come a long way from Paris to Frankfurt just to see the art galleries that are displayed in your
museum
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. I had a high expectation regarding
this
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trip
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 as I saw a bunch of positive reviews on the internet about the
museum
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. I bought the most expensive ticket package
,
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 so that I can experience all of the things offered
from
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this
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 gallery centre. As
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expected, My family and I had the best summer
trip
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 by exploring the majestic of your
museum
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 and were pleased with the service of the staff.
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, the automated gate system at the entrance sort of made me confuse, since there was no clear instruction or the staff who
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 next to the gate. After all, the time and money that my family and I spent on the
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 to Frankfurt was paid off by the joy and mesmerizing experience throughout the
museum
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trip
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. I am looking forward to visiting your
museum
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 in the future. Best regard, Rafesal Daffa

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coherence and cohesion
Consider structuring your letter with clearer paragraphs to enhance readability and coherence. For example, separate your description of the visit from your likes and dislikes.
task achievement
Make sure to provide specific suggestions for improvements, as this will strengthen your response and show a deeper engagement with the task.
writing tone
Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is essential for effective communication.
descriptive detail
You provided a vivid description of your experience, which helps engage the reader and illustrate your visit.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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