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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs. To what extrnt do you agree or disagree with the above opinion? What are the some of the job skills employers look for new employees.

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Universities
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 should offer their students in-demand
skills
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 which will help them to obtain
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 jobs in
future
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.
This
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 providing practical
skills
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 support to the students
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in
 forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
this
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 viewpoint stems from various causes. One significant aspect is
universities
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 should provide them
practical
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with practical
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 job
skills
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 along
theoretical
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 parts as both are necessary for the development of student's
mind
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, most of the employees looking for
the
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 person who can work without extra training so
universities
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 should take responsibility to teach them
skills
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such
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 as digital marketing or software tools.
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,
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are
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 uncertain so if do not get any jobs in
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them
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 can start their self business. It is beneficial for both professionally and personally.
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, it
also
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enhance
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 their confidence as they know most about the concept so they do not need to feel scared or nervous. They can give
interview
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interviews
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 with full of confidence. Nowadays, employers are looking for a person who
have
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 both knowledge and
skills
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 to do a job
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 as related to welding, plumbing or soft
skills
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. In conclusion,
universities
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 have a vital responsibility to equip students with the
skills
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 required to succeed in their
future
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 careers.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clarify your stance in the introduction by explicitly stating how much you agree or disagree with the opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more transitional phrases to enhance the flow between ideas and paragraphs, which will improve coherence.
Task Achievement
Add more specific examples of the skills that employers look for to strengthen your argument.
Focused on Topic
The essay addresses the topic and highlights the importance of skills alongside theoretical knowledge.
Organization
You have structured your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is a good practice for coherence.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job market
  • digital literacy
  • soft skills
  • professional skills
  • workforce
  • graduate employability
  • skill gap
  • job readiness
  • internships
  • industry partnerships
  • academic subjects
  • curriculum integration
  • practical skills
  • communication skills
  • teamwork
  • problem-solving abilities
  • comprehensive education
  • theoretical knowledge
  • career services
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