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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line chart illustrates Australian
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 abroad alongside
Japan
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,
US
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the US
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,
China
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,
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India
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and India
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since
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 1990 until 2012 calculated by a percentage.
Overall
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, the data shows
Japan
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 dropped significantly during the first
year
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. Just
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Japan
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, the US reduced the trend at the start of the
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.
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China
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 raised consistently in the initial
years
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.
Similarly
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,
India
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 has increased slightly at the beginning. With regards to the data,
Japan
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 has decreased dramatically from around 30% to 20% in one
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.
Thereafter
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,
Japan
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 decreased barely for 17
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.
Likewise
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, the US declined from approximately 15% to under 10%.
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, after the US grew a bit around 15%.
On the other hand
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,during the first
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year
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year,
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China
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 and
India
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 were stable under 5%.
Afterward
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Afterward,
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 in 12
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years
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years,
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China
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 climbed drastically from 5% to 30%. In the same way,
India
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 has increased from about under 5% to approximately 10% in 10
years
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.
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, in 2
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India
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 dropped slightly nearly 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, china, india, year, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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