You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: •Say what you have learned in your present job, •Suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department, •Explain why you do not wish to leave the company.

Dear Mr. Blake, I am writing to ask you to move a different section in your company. I started my current job two years ago so in my opinion it is time to work for a different department in your organization. As I mentioned above, I

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been working since 2023 for you as an estimator. During these 2 years, I learned your system where and how people estimate

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a new potential job.

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, I have already known how to communicate with our present clients and how to arrange a meeting with them. The most beneficial for your company is that you will be one of the most educated people in the particular position. I assume I am the right person who

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work as a chief of all estimators and

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I think that I could give you a new motivation system for all estimators departments.

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I heard a really strong story about me that I want to leave the company, As a matter of fact, I do not want to work for anyone else because I am really happy working for your organization.

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you told me that you see the future with me and

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all the management is like my a new family. Yours faithfully xxxxx xxxxx

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grammar

Be sure to proofread and correct small grammatical errors, such as 'move a different section' to 'move to a different section'.

coherence

Try to structure the letter with clear paragraphs that focus on a single idea, ensuring each paragraph flows logically into the next.

task achievement

You demonstrate a clear understanding of the context and purpose of the letter, expressing your desire to grow within the company.

tone

Your letter has a friendly tone, which is suitable for addressing your manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

213 words

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