The graphs below show the percentage of graduates that got full-time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia, and the average salary of both these types of graduates, from 2004 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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that got full-time jobs after graduating from university in Australia, and the average salary of both types of

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from 2004 to 2012, the information

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in percentage.

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from the graph there are two

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first is

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,and the second is other

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, the first graph

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that got

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, we see that other

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show

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rise in 2006 and after that shows a decrease of the percentage in 2012 by nearly 60, and the

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show stable

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2008 it shows little

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, in the second graph we

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they

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by the end of the period, in other

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. In conclusion, we

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percentage of both

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and

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full time

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jobs after

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than other

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, math with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 9 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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