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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
present
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 the
unemployment
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 rates in the
UK
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, the rest of Europe and
Japan
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 from 1993 to 2007. the information
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is shows
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shows
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shown
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 by numbers.
overall
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,
its
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it is
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 clear from the graph that, the
UK
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show
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showed
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 a decline
at
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in
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 the
unemploymet
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unemployment
rate
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 in the presented period, but there were some
of
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apply
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years
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the years
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 they had high rates
on
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apply
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it
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apply
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, in the EU
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate
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 shows they have
steady
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a steady
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 decline
at
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in
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 their
rate
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 to , in
japan
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 shows that
the
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they
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 have
stable
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a stable
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rate
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 of in the
unemployment
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rate
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 in some of the years, but in the mid of the period shows a change in that
rate
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.
according to
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 what
shown
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is shown
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, the
Uk
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 between 1993 till 2001
drops
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dropped
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 from almost 12 to nearly 5 in 2001
untill
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until
 2005
show
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showing
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 little increase in the
rate
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 to almost 6, the
eu
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EU
 declined from almost 10 to 8 by the end of
period
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the period
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,
japan
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 shows
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an inlcline
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inlcline
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incline
 in the
rate
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 from 2001 to 2007. in conclusion , the
most
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apply
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country has the
least
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lowest
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unemployment
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rate
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 is
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japan
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Japan
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,
then
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uk
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 the
last
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one
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the
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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EU.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, uk, japan, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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