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The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart shows that the
values
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 made in petroleum
products
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 and engineered goods are relatively high
while
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 the
values
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 made in
argricultural
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agricultural
products
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 and textiles are relatively low. The
values
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 gained in
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gems
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the gems
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 and
jewellery
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 field lies in between. Regarding the change in
values
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 made in each product field from 2015 to 2016, the textiles field has shown a significant change
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in that
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that
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apply
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the
values
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has
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 increased by 15.24%
while
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 the agricultural
products
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has
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have
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underwent
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undergone
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 a
little
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small
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 increase in
values
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 that
it has
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have
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 increased
for
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by
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 only 0.81%. Concerning the difference in the
values
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 of
petrleum
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petroleum
, engineered goods
and
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apply
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gems
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 and
jewellery
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,the
values
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 made from petroleum
products
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has
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have
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 soared
for
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by
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 3%
while
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 the
values
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 made from engineered goods
has
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have
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 surged
for
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by
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 8.5%. The
values
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 made from
gems
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 and
jewellery
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has
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have
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rised
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risen
raised
for
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by
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 5.18%. By reviewing the above changes, except
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gems
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for gems
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 and
jewellery
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products
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, the
values
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 made from all the other fields
has
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have
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 increased from 2015 to 2016.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words values, products, gems, jewellery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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