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You had traveled by air and had an unpleasant flight. Write a letter to the airline company Manager. In your letter- Describe the flight Explain what the problem was Ask how this issue can be solved

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my disappointment towards the service I received
in
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 King Airlines.
Last
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 week, I was travelling to
Chiacgo
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Chicago
 for my business meeting and I got the economy
seat
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. At the counter, I requested to upgrade my ticket to business class, but the flight was full
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due
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to
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so
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which
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I didn’t get the business class
seat
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. The seats were comfortable and clean. In
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, the digital screen was working,
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, after air
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turbulence
turbalance
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 it stopped working by itself I was so upset with
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stituation
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situation
 and I called a crew member. As it was
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lunch time
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lunchtime
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, I was
patientaly
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patiently
 waiting for them. After
sometime
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, one crew member came and
he
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said they
will
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 change my
seat
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, but neither they changed the
seat
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 nor they fixed my issue. When I asked them again, they didn’t behave well with me. I am requesting you to kindly pay
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closer attention to
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 matter. Either change the staff or training should be provided to them. I am attaching the name of the person who misbehaved with me. If anything is required, kindly email me. I will wait for a prompt and a positive response. Yours Sincerely, Mark Rogers

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking the letter into clear paragraphs for each main point (description of the flight, issue, and resolution). This will enhance clarity and logical flow.
task achievement
Ensure to maintain a polite tone throughout, as this can improve the perceived professionalism of the letter. There are a couple of phrases that might be softened for a more formal tone.
task achievement
You have clearly described your unpleasant experience and provided specific details about what happened during your flight, which is essential for a task response.
coherence and cohesion
The letter follows a standard format with a proper greeting and closing, which is a positive aspect of coherence in writing.
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