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The chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of five different
industries
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 in Canada making
e-commerce
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purchases
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 between 2015 and 2019. The vertical axis represents the percentage of businesses ranging from 0 to 70%, indicating the extent of
e-commerce
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 adoption. The chart compares these percentages across different
industries
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, identified by colour, over the five-year period. In 2015, there was a notable disparity in online purchasing across
industries
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. The construction
sector
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 showed the lowest proportion, at approximately 24%.
In contrast
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, the information and communication
sector
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 had the highest percentage of
e-commerce
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purchases
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, exceeding 60%.
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However
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 over time, all
industries
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 experienced a significant increase in their proportion of online
purchases
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. By 2019, the construction
sector
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risen
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 to around 50%, demonstrating a substantial growth in
e-commerce
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purchases
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 .
Similarly
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, the information and communication
sector
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 increased to about 65%, maintaining its position as the leading industry for online
purchases
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. In conclusion, the chart clearly demonstrates a growing trend in
e-commerce
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 adoption across all
industries
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 in Canada between 2015 and 2019.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industries, e-commerce, purchases, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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