You recently saw an advertisement in a newspaper seeking volunteers to do unpaid work with local children. You are interested in this work. Write a letter to the head of the organisation. In your letter express your interest ask for details of the work that needs to be done let them know when you are available.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my interest

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applying for the current position that

available

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in your organisation. As someone who loved interact with children and

have

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some experience working with kids, I believe, I will be a great candidate. I

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appreciate

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you

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provide me

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details regarding

this

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job, could you please provide me

some

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detail

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about what kind of job I need to perform, is it teaching, supervising or just playing with the kids?

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Also

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do I need special qualifications to perform

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job? and how many hours per week

you

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require me to come? I am available to start 3rd of May, and I will be available Monday until Thursday from 7am until mid-day. Thank you for your time, and do not hesitate to contact me if you

have

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need

further

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information.

Your

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sincerely,

Jessilia

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Jessica

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language

Consider rephrasing "express my interest on applying" to "express my interest in applying" for better accuracy.

structure

Inquire about specific tasks in a clearer way by separating questions into distinct sentences. This will improve clarity.

clarity

To make your availability clearer, mention the starting time for each day explicitly or make it more concise.

positive

Your enthusiasm for working with children is evident and creates a positive tone in your letter.

positive

You clearly presented your availability, which is essential for the recipient's understanding of your commitment.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

144 words

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