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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The layout displays information about the plan
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 a particular institution’s
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sport
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sports
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centre
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present
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and how it will look after
repurposing
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 process.
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predictable
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 view of the
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sport
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centre
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 almost changed significantly compared to
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 plan. The majority
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related
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 to new places like changing rooms,one more pool and several amenities around the
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sport
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centre
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. With a detailed analysis of the plan, a place between outdoor courts in the present layout will remain stable in the future. The leisure pool will be added at the south-east side of the
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sport
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centre
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.
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righ
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right
 position of the gym will be added new 2 dance studios. Between the seating and dance studios, there will
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 sports hall place.
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 the future layout,
at
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 the both
south-east
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southeast
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 and west sides of the
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sport
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centre
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, 2 more
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changing rooms will be installed. There will
new
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 variety of amenities will be added in the future, they will
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 sports shop and cafe.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader.
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Use more specific details to explain the changes you mention.
coherence and cohesion
Try to provide a brief conclusion to sum up the main points you discussed.
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You provide a clear overview of the plans and changes in the sports centre.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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