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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The following plans illustrate the current design of a university
sports
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center
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 and its future appearance post-upgrade.
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, the revolution expands indoor facilities and adds social spaces, making the centre more modern and functional. Presently,
university
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the university
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sports
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 centre has outdoor courts on both sides, with a gym to the north side of
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 centre, changing rooms, a 25m swimming
pool
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, seating, and a reception in the middle. The outdoor courts are located on opposite sides, with the
pool
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 and seating area centrally positioned. The redeveloped plan introduces several new amenities. The east outdoor court will be replaced by a
sports
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 hall and two dance studios. A leisure
pool
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 is predicted to
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 alongside the existing 25m
pool
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on
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 the new area of previous the west outdoor courts and a
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 shop and cafe will be presented near the reception. Additional changing rooms will be provided, and the gym will be relocated. The seating area remains but is repositioned.

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task achievement
Consider providing a clearer overall description of the changes being made, emphasizing how they improve functionality. You could enhance the conclusion by summarizing the overall benefits of the redevelopment.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use cohesive devices effectively to link ideas across paragraphs. For instance, transition words can help guide the reader through comparisons more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
In the body paragraphs, ensure that comparisons are explicitly stated to enhance the clarity of changes. Explicitly mention similarities and differences between the current layout and the redevelopment.
task achievement
The essay presents the main features of the plans effectively, with a clear layout of what currently exists and what will change.
coherence and cohesion
You have a good understanding of the structure, with an introduction, body, and a cohesive mention of features.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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