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The pie charts illustrate the comparison of the water consumption in three fields (household, industry and agriculture) in San Diego County, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts illustrate the comparison of the water consumption in three fields (household, industry and agriculture) in San Diego County, California and the rest of the world.
The pie charts give information about the comparison of
water
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 utilization in three different fields, household, industry, and farming in San Diego County, California,USA and the rest of the planet.
Residential
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 area
represented
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 in blue, industry in yellow and green for agriculture.
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, it is observed that the Agricultural sector consumed the highest amount of
water
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 worldwide and had the least proportion of
water
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 used in San Diego County and California.
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, houses were the second highest areas that utilized
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 in the other two cities and had the least percentage of
water
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 utilized worldwide.
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, farming, industries and
residental
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residential
 services had 69%, 23% and 8% use of
water
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 respectively worldwide.
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, in San Diego and California,
majority
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 of the amount of
water
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 was used by houses with a little over 50% and 39% in the same order. The industrial and agricultural sectors in these two cities did not use as much
water
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 as the latter with 23% and 33%,17% and 28% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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