You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store, and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, Complain about the problem Propose action for the store to take Request confirmation that this is agreed

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter to express my disappointment with the Dyson hair curler which I bought one month ago. On my 23rd birthday, my father gave me

surprise

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a surprise

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that he

will

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would

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buy me a Dyson hair curler and dryer. I was over the moon when I heard

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news because I really wanted to buy these products

from

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for

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long

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a long

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time. And

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came true on my birthday, we bought a whole set from your Company.

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week,

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I was using

curler

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a curler

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, it automatically stopped for 5 minutes and I got tensed. After

few

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a few

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minutes, it turned on and

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thing happened twice

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same day. On Sunday, I was so stressed

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that

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it couldn't even turned on for 30 minutes. I told my father about

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problem he tried to find

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solution but was unable to tackle the issue.

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product is newly purchased and I don't know why it's not working properly. I would like to replace

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product as it was mentioned on the documents that I have three years of warranty and

granty

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warranty

. Hope I will get

replacement

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a replacement

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soon

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than possible. I look forward to your prompt reply. Yours Faithfully, Saijbir.

kaursaijbirWed May 14 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea. The issue with the product and your request for a replacement could be clearly separated into two paragraphs.

task achievement

Make sure to use a more formal tone throughout. For instance, phrases like 'I got tensed' could be replaced with 'I was quite anxious'.

task achievement

The letter has a clear purpose and expresses your feelings about the product well, particularly regarding your disappointment and the anticipation for a solution.

coherence and cohesion

You've included a personal touch by mentioning your birthday, which makes the letter more engaging.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

200 words

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