You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, introduce yourself say why are you interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Mary. I have recently moved to a new neighbourhood near your sports centre. I am
sointerersted
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interested
so interested
in joining your private sports
club
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, as it is not far from my living place which brings me a lot of convenience.
Additonaly
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Additionally
, one of my friends
recommend
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this
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sports
club
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to me because your
club
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has
very
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good reputation. I
will
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would
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really appreciate it if you
can
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could
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share
me
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apply
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more information and
detail
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details
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about the
club
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. Could you tell me what kinds of facilities for workouts? If I am your
mebership
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membership
,
is
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there any services and privileges ? What about the costs, if I pay on an annual basis or a
month
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basis? I look forward to hearing from you! warm regards, Mary

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for spelling mistakes such as 'sointerersted' and 'mebership'. Also, use more linking words to enhance the flow of ideas.
task achievement
Provide a more detailed introduction about yourself, such as your hobbies or what activities you are interested in pursuing at the club.
coherence and cohesion
It's good to ask specific questions, but try to group them logically to improve the overall structure of your letter.
task achievement
You have a clear intention to join the sports club and provide reasons for your interest.
coherence and cohesion
Your concluding remark 'I look forward to hearing from you' nicely encourages a response.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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