The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
bar
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chart
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illustartes
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illustrates
the shares of expenditures for five fact categories anmog four nations in
period
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the period
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2009.
According to
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the above
bar
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chart
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,
overall
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.It's clear that
,
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ther
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there
is
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a genral
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genral
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general
trend of
increase
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increasing
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three
type
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such
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as
,
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food,housing,and transportation
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it's notable that health care .and clothing faced
decrease
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a decrease
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. An Addition. The range of the UNITED STATE was
disparity
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the disparity
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between three
countrise
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countries
.
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However
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it
apprach
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reached
a peak in
the
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apply
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housing with 25% . moving to the second city .CANADA ,
to
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in
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particular the line was
approximatly
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approximately
stable between housing ,and transportation with 20% to 21% .
furtheremore
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furthermore
,UNITED KINGDOM. Have
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a signifcant
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signifcant dropp
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significant drop
off in
healtcare
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healthcare
it's
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almost 0% and, by the
way
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way,
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it was the lowest percentage in the
bar
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chart
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.
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, we have JAPAN with
high
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a high
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rate in
food
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the food
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section
wich
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which
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is
climb
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climbing
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above 20% . Looking
to
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at
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the above
bar
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chart
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it's clear and easy to consider the
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significant
signifacnt
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significant approach
aproach
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approach
which is
go
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to
UNITED
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the UNITED
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STATE in section housing ,meanwhile, it's notable that
UNITED
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the UNITED
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KINGDOM had
droop
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drop
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off with almost 0% in part health care

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, chart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • shares
  • major
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • trends
  • observations
  • patterns
  • highest
  • lowest
  • spending
  • features
  • 2009
  • Japan
  • United Kingdom
  • Canada
  • United States
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