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The graphs below give information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center Melbourne, AUstralia for the period 2000 to 2020. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant .

The graphs below give information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center Melbourne, AUstralia for the period 2000 to 2020. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant .
The line chart displays data about the numbers of members for various activities at the social centre of Melbourne,Australia over a 20-year
period
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 from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, the film club almost remained stable at the top of the
number
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 of
participants
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while
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 amateur dramatics exposed
significant
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 level off till the end of the
period
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. Detailed analysis of the graph, the
number
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 of
participants
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 in table tennis sharply increased after 2010 and reached its maximum level,approximately 53 people.
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, the mounting
participants
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 of in martial arts fluctuated between 33 and 36 over 20 years.
Participants
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 in amateur dramatics and table tennis were the same(20) in 2010.
Moreover
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, Musical performances
initially
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 had 0 members until
in
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2005
then
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 its
participants
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 steadily rose from 0 to 18
along
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over
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 the
period
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. The
number
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 of
participants
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 in amateur dramatics plummeted from 29 to under 10 after in 2005.
As a result
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, during
this
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 20-year
period
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, the most growth in the
number
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 of
participants
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 took place in table tennis, its members reached 55 from 16.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, number, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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