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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter * explain why you would like the job * give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ * say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australta You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam #advertisement#australian

Dear Sir , I am writing
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 letter to inform you I am interested in the nanny job that was published in the newspaper . I have done my graduation
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Bachelor
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 of Physiotherapy in India after that I
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admission
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 Child care program for my permanent residency. It took me 8 months to complete the course and I have immense knowledge because I used to work at day care and I
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 have a CPR certificate and other documents related to
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 field. I am
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 hard-working and dedicated candidate .
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, I live close to your residential area which is only 15 minutes
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 , I will be on time without any delay
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another advantage if you hire . I hope you can consider me for
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 job on the basis of my knowledge and studies . I am looking forward to hearing from you . Your's faithfully Sam

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task achievement
Make sure to include all tasks completely. You might want to more clearly explain how you will spend your free time in Australia.
coherence
Use clear paragraphs for each idea. This helps make your letter easier to read and understand.
coherence
Try to vary your sentences and use polite language. This makes a better impression in your letter.
positive
You have included your qualifications and experience, which is good for the job application.
positive
Your closing statement is polite and shows eagerness, which is positive.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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