IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You and your neighbors have noticed that the rubbish collection services where you live have become quite bad. Write a letter to your local council. In your letter: -Explain what you have recently experienced . -Explain what your neighbors recently experienced . -Ask what action will be taken to improve the service.

Dear
sir
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/madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to aware you
about
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of
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garbage
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the garbage
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 picking service
of
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in
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 our town which is causing issues
to
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for
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 the individuals. Local people are facing various problems regarding rubbish collection service as on;y one truck is assigned to pick
garbage
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 of our town
due to
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 which it is impossible for them to complete all houses
of
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in
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 our area in one day.
This
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cause
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causes
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the accumalation
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accumalation
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accumulation
 of waste in the homes as sometimes they come to pick it
after
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up after
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 two or three weeks which
also
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 results in spreading diseases in our neighbourhood. Recently, one of my friends living next to my house
,
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apply
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 got infected because they noticed
number
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a number
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 of flies and bees in their backyard
while
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 they were enjoying
barbeque
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a barbeque
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. I request you to increase the count of
garbage
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 collection vehicles or
number
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the number
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 of days for them for
this
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 service
according to
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size
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the size
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 of the area. So that people can throw their
garbage
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 weekly and can live a healthy life. I hope you will take my problem
in
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into
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 consideration and will work on
this
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 as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Muskan Jand

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coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs more clearly. Start each paragraph with a main idea. This helps to organize your letter better.
task achievement
Make sure to use correct spelling. For example, 'accumulation' is spelled incorrectly as 'accumalation'.
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It would be better to be more polite in your request. Instead of 'I request', you could say 'I would appreciate it if you could consider...'.
task achievement
You addressed the issue clearly and provided a personal experience that illustrates the problem.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear purpose: to inform the council about the rubbish service issue.
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