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You recently went on a trip and thought that the tour guide was particularly helpful. Now you would like to show him/ her your appreciation. Write a letter to the manager of the tour company. In your letter describe the tour explain why you liked the tour guide say what you would like the manager to do to reward the tour guide

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my satisfaction with your company's customer service. My name is Saij and I booked
tour
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a tour
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 guide
last
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 month from your AX company. I would like to appreciate the service which your team members are providing to the customers. I went to
the
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Niagara Falls for the first time and wasn't sure what to explore. I decided to hire
tour
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a tour
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 guide so that we could have
idea
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an idea
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where
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of where
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 to go.
Firstly
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, we went to see the view of
the
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Niagara Falls from
top
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the top
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 level and it was incredible. I can't explain my experience in words.
Along with
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 that, we went
to
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on
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boat
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a boat
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 ride to experiment
the
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with the
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 falls from down side.
Next
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The next
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 day, we went on
sky
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the sky
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 wheel and
view
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the view
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 was amazing
in
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at
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the
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night. I went with my family and we enjoyed our trip
alot
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a lot
.
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, we enjoyed the trip only because of
member
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members
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 from your team.
Who
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 guided us very well and his name is Ankul. His behaviour was very nice. He was very calm and humble during our whole tour. The way he managed the show us everything in the city was amazing.
Apart from
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this
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, I have added 10% tips
with
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 my bills and hope it will be credited to him as soon as possible. For my
coming
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future trips, I would like to recommend his service and will appreciate the efforts he made to make us happy. Thank you once again! Yours Sincerely, Saij.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate different ideas into clear paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Add a more formal greeting and closing to match the tone of the letter.
task response
Explain more about what you want the manager to do as a reward for the tour guide.
task achievement
You shared personal experiences which made the letter heartfelt.
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