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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates the number of
books
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 borrowed from village libraries in four different regions over a period of time.
Additionally
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, the pie chart shows the distribution of readers' preferences by book genre.
Overall
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, the number of
books
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 lent generally increased in most regions by autumn, except in Ryeslip where it declined. In terms of genre preferences, fiction was by far the most popular category,
while
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 scientific
books
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 were the least preferred.
To begin
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 with the line graph, Sutton Wood Library experienced a significant drop in book loans in August, followed by a sharp rise in September, reaching a level higher than in the summer months. West Eaton and Church Mount libraries
also
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 saw a steady increase in usage, with their lending numbers peaking in September.
In contrast
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, Ryeslip showed a gradual decline in borrowed
books
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 by the end of the period. Looking at the pie chart, fiction
books
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 accounted for almost half (approximately 45%) of all borrowed
books
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, making them the most preferred genre. In comparison, scientific literature represented the smallest share at only 10%. Meanwhile, self-improvement
books
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 were chosen by 20% of readers, and the remaining 25% preferred other types of
books
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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