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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates how many
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 were borrowed from June to September 2014 from four libraries in the village,
while
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 the pie chart shows how percentage of the
types
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 of the
books
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books
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 borrowed during that duration.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
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 have different volumes each month, and fiction was the highest type in that period In June, exactly 300 with the title Ryeslip were out from the library.
Then
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, it dropped significantly until just below 200 were borrowed. Sutton Wood had a fluctuating volume. Starting at precisely 250 in June, it increased moderately to just above that volume before declining extremely to 100. In the final period, it experienced an extreme rise
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 200, making it the highest number of
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 borrowed. The two others started at the same amount. From just 50,
then
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 West Eaton surpassed Church Mount to 150 in August. It remained stable until September,
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 the Church Mount had a stable increase until the volume was the same in September. Speaking about the book
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, fiction
books
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 accounted for almost half of all
types
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. Following the others, literature represented the fewest
books
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, with only 10%. Another 3
types
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 were around 11% to 20% for each type.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 81%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, types with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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