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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter: explain why you are writing express concern about the missing card ask them what they intend to do You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Manager, I am writing in response to a recent letter
i
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I
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recived
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received
 from your bank regarding the delivery
on
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of
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 my new bank
card
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.
According to
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letter
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letter,
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 the
card
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 should have been missing from my wallet.
This
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 situation is
quite
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concern
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 to me
,
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apply
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 because
i
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I
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 am worried
about
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that
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 my
card
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 has been lost or even stolen during the mailing
proces
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process
. If it
fall
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to
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on
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another
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the
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hand
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other hand
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, there is a big problem if they have access to my account and will
be
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apply
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make my balance
loss
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, and when it
happend
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happened
happens
 to me,
i
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I
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hove
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have
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 you
tou
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to
 block my bank account to save my balance. I would appreciate it if you could handle
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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 and let me know what steps you will
be
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take. Please help me to get
a new information
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new information
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 about
this
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 situation. I would
also
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 like to know how long it will take to
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receive
 a replacement
card
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. I look forward
tou
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to
 your response. Alex.

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task achievement
Make sure to check the spelling and grammar in your letter. For example, 'i' should be 'I' and 'should have been missing' should be 'should have been included'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group your ideas logically. Each paragraph should have one main idea. Consider separating your feelings about the missing card and the actions you want from the bank into different paragraphs.
task achievement
You clearly state the problem, which helps the reader understand your concern.
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You express urgency, which shows that the issue is important to you.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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