The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

The bar charts compare the numbers of men and women aged 60 to 64 in

employment

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in four countries:

Australia

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Japan

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,The

USA

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, and

Belgium

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, in the years 1970 and 2000.

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employment

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in all countries

are

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higher than that of

female

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females

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. male

employment

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showed a decline

through out

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the two years , and had the most significant

decreasein

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decrease in

Belgium

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however

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, female

employment

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Australia

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and The

USA

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rose gradually ,

while

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droped

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dropped

slightly in

Japan

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and

Belgium

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. male

employment

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decreased in all the four

countrise

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countries

Australia

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Japan

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, The

USA

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and

Belgium

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Australia

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had the second dramatic fall at 74% to 47% in 2000.

Japan

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had the highest number of male

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at 84% in 1970 but it dropped

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slightly to 76 in 2000.

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also The

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USA

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number declined from 77 to 53% in 2000

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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

Nowadays, many young people are attracted to dangerous sports such as snowboarding or mountain biking. What makes these sports so attractive? What measures should be taken to minimize the risks?

Watching a live performance such as a play, concert or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think is a possible solution?

rev----jan---It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

It is the government's responsibility to provide financial support to old people after they retire or individuals should save money for themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.