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The bar chart below shows the average amount of money spent per week on five different leisure activities by people in six age groups in the UK in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average amount of money spent per week on five different leisure activities by people in six age groups in the UK in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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variety
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a variety
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 of leisure
activities
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spent by various
age
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groups
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 in the UK during 2024.
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, the majority of those aged between 16-24 and 25-34 purchased weekly
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 their free time
activities
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.
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, as the
age
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 increased, the younger
age
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groups
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 preferred outside
activities
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 more than the elderly
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only
favored
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 indoor
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. With regards to the categories that had the most
especially
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 for the young. In terms of Streaming Services and Gym with Fitness, those who aged from 25 to 34 consistently predominated
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 all the
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groups
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, with the 65+ group
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 out the least at £3 and £2, respectively. Regarding the Dining Out where people in the
age
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 bracket between 16 and 35 ranged from £16 to £18,
whereas
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 the remaining
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groups
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 made up from £5 to £12. Moving on to the remaining
activities
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 which
favored
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 more toward the older
age
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groups
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. Notably, the figure for Reading Books had the most spent for those aged 65+ (£8) and the least for the youngest group (£3).
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, people in the
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 range between 55-64 and 65+ accounted for £9 and £10,respectively, with the remaining
age
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groups
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 ranged from £1-£6.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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