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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
the line chart shows four different countries
of
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with
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 percentages of Australian exports between 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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, we can see here
that
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the
most
Correct word choice
biggest
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growen
Correct your spelling
grown
 country is Japan, the rest three countries
is
Verb problem
have
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went
Wrong verb form
gone
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 up and down a
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little
lettle
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little
by
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over
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 the years
Firstly
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, we can look at China, it had a huge
grown
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growth
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 from 1990 until 2012
by
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 percentages of Australian export from about 0 to 30 and never went down, after that comes India
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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starts
Wrong verb form
started
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with
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at
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 almost 0 and
go
Wrong verb form
went
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 high
by
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 the years until India end with around 5,
Secondly
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, we have Japan
that
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which
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start
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starts
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 with almost 27 and after that stars to
went
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go
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 down until around 20 after that comes
US
Correct article usage
the US
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 starts with almost 12 and it goes high and low
by
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over
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 the years but it
ended
Wrong verb form
ends
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 up
with
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at
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 around 7.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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